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Sometimes I lose things.

Sometimes it's little things.

Things like my ipod or my keys.

Bobby pins and chapsticks often evanesce without warning or cause.

Sometimes I lose bigger things.

Things like my favorite sweater or my school bag.

Things like the reason I came into a room,

Or the memories of what I had for breakfast that morning.

Sometimes I lose my train of thought, or the point I was trying to make or an idea.

Sometimes I lose arguments.

Sometimes I lose friends.



I like to think all the things I lose go to the same place.

A plain white place full of hair ties and dollar store bracelets,

And I like to think they all wait there, patiently.

Wait there to be found.



One day I lost my passion.

It floated away like a helium balloon drifting toward the sun.

But I couldn't let it go.

I chased it into the sky,

Past the moon and the stars and the milky-way,

I followed it into the white place,

I faced a sea of bobby pins and hair ties and chap-sticks.

I faced all those lost arguments and ideas and aspirations and promises,

And I told them I was sorry.

They asked me why I never came looking for them, why I'd let them disappear.

I just told them the truth.  I said,

Some things need to be lost, so new things can be found.



I tied my passion to my wrist with a piece of twine,

Let it float above my head like a guardian.

It reminds me that so long as that knot holds,

(I double-tied it just to be safe),

It doesn't matter how many things I lose,

I'll keep what matters.
Comments appreciated. :D

If you like this, you may enjoy my short story "Forever" [link]

It's sort of similar.

Thanks for all the nice things you're saying guys, you're all so kind!
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The vision... it's really very deep. Very beautiful. Very meaningful. It shows what truly matters. It's the things on the inside, not the outside that count, and although the outside things are really nice, they can be distracting and... you really need to focus on what's real.
The originality is brilliant. I've never seen anything like this before. Very one-of-a-kind.
The technique is very fine, very precise. It captures the writer's depth of thought, and all the emotions in this, all of that in just a few words.
It affected me deeply. How well this was written, it's like it's happening to you right here, right now.
This was beautiful.
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TheRand0mArtist Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Amazing, I don't know what to say, it really made me look at things diffrently, I liked it a lot! Good job!
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bittersweet-ink Featured By Owner Dec 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
this is just wonderful ♥
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Bairdsgirl11797 Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:faint: You're amazing.
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ArthurFan3 Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2013
lose Bunny
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LiliWrites Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:wave: Hello!

I've used your awesome deviation as part of my #TheTitlePage project, found here: liliwrites.deviantart.com/art/…

Thanks for sharing your art with the community. :heart:
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Fysialis Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
This is honestly one of the most beautiful things I have ever read!! Thank you so much for making this exist.
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BatmanWithBunnyEars Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2013   General Artist
I've seen people talk about abstract nouns like physical things before, but seldom this effectively.  I love how natural and unpretentious the language is; it feels like you're leveling with me about a great truth.  I can see why it's so popular, since it left an impression that I think will stick with me.
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snowtigress27 Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2013
Beautiful!!! The imagery is simple but powerful. And everything is so relatable to the audience. By the title I expected this to be dark and gloomy about broken hearts and losing someone you love. But it was cheerful. Thoughtful, but positive. Well done!!
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Wolfandlion66 Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2013
amazingness
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Sunshineglare Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2013
I love this <3
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aurora-celest Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2013
How in the hell has this not been awarded a DD?
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webmasterseb Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Vivid imagery, very awesome :) thanks for this.
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MCR-BVB-FOB-forever Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Wow this is incredible! I love the concept of all lost things going somewhere together...it's calming somehow
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Kawaii-Armstrong Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2013
This is incredible! It just resonates with every part of me. Great job! :D
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kutyus-REX Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I read this the first time...over a year ago? And I remember it made me extremely sad, but I couldn't agree with its sentiment because I didn't want to think that keeping your passion could ever make up for losing some things.... Now things changed, and i realized I STILL remembered several verses of this poem...so I found it again and re-read it. Now I'm just extremely happy I can agree with it :)
*Favorited
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Kon78 Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is... AMAZING! Omg this is perfect:)
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Bramblecat4 Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2012
this is amazing
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BlackAprilBlossom Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2012  Hobbyist
Beautiful. Amazing. Touching.
I love it. added this to my favorite.
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K-chan1 Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
This is very inspiring! :3
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NicolasLupin Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Very deep and well written!
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Mystic-Jay Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
beautifully written!
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SkyeSteiner Featured By Owner Sep 18, 2012  Student Writer
Amazing :)
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xxbluedreamer Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
very beautiful c:
I was wondering, is it ok if I draw a fanart of this? it's fine if you don't want me to, I'll understand :)
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TheAverageOne Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2012
Really, really nice.
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babyangel7155 Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2012
just one word: beautiful
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trumpet1113 Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2012
I LOVE THIS SO MUCH <3
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Oiyuki Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2012
This is lovely
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xBeautifulDreamerx Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
This is one of the first pieces of writing I have added into my favorites since been a member of deviantART.
Your phrasing here is remarkable and your images made me smile. Somewhere in the middle of the poem, I felt deep and introspective, but now that I have reached the end, I feel happy and warm on the inside (something desperately needed after the first week of class). Thank you for sharing your art with me -- words are such under-appreciated as tools of art. Of course, they are the most capable of creating beautiful images.
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Freedom5000 Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2012  Student General Artist
Absolutely beautiful! The words fit the mood perfectly. I can't even find words to describe is epic poem before me!
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MewKokoa Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2012
I find this extremely motivational...
I hope you don't mind, but I think I'm going to print this out to put up on my wall for daily inspiration.
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tribble-of-doom Featured By Owner Sep 1, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Aw gosh that's so nice of you <3 please do!
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MewKokoa Featured By Owner Sep 1, 2012
I will. Thank you for your approval. n.n
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Tehownageburst Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
This is awesome o0o!!!!!
Theres a sword on the icon to click this however? What doth it be for?
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crystaljelly Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2012  Hobbyist
oh my goodness, this is so amazing! This is extremely creative. I think it's super cute C: nicely done!
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sfosness98 Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2012
The only thing I would change in this poem is the order of your list of lost items at the beginning. They are listed from least to most important, and I think my ipod and keys are more important to me than bobby pins and chapsticks.

Other than that, this poem is absolutely perfect!
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faerismoka Featured By Owner Aug 27, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
this makes sense. :)
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TFT45 Featured By Owner Aug 27, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
beautiful message
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BearNecesities Featured By Owner Aug 27, 2012
YOU MUST BE STUPID.

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ANSWER TO ALL OF YOUR QUESTIONS:
BECAUSE I'M A MOTHERFUCKING BEAR!!!
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wolffang29 Featured By Owner Aug 27, 2012
Hey tribbs big fan may I plz plz make a fan video or fan art for u but also may I use ur design so it is twice as good so answr if I may make a fan art/video using ur design thnx
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chatwithstar Featured By Owner Aug 27, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
This is a truly beautiful poem. It's a talent...an art....a masterpiece! :la:
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aiedail-guardian Featured By Owner Aug 27, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
This is so beautiful!
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SukeNs Featured By Owner Aug 27, 2012  Student General Artist
Wow. That's all I'll say. :D
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TheBlueDuck Featured By Owner Aug 27, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
absolutely bootiful
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Chamomiles Featured By Owner Aug 27, 2012
beautiful writing.
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Darkleonn Featured By Owner Aug 27, 2012  Student Writer
it made me cry while smiling,
this was one of those special moments, when you read that special something that u needed to read in order to get better
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