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Sometimes I lose things.

Sometimes it's little things.

Things like my ipod or my keys.

Bobby pins and chapsticks often evanesce without warning or cause.

Sometimes I lose bigger things.

Things like my favorite sweater or my school bag.

Things like the reason I came into a room,

Or the memories of what I had for breakfast that morning.

Sometimes I lose my train of thought, or the point I was trying to make or an idea.

Sometimes I lose arguments.

Sometimes I lose friends.



I like to think all the things I lose go to the same place.

A plain white place full of hair ties and dollar store bracelets,

And I like to think they all wait there, patiently.

Wait there to be found.



One day I lost my passion.

It floated away like a helium balloon drifting toward the sun.

But I couldn't let it go.

I chased it into the sky,

Past the moon and the stars and the milky-way,

I followed it into the white place,

I faced a sea of bobby pins and hair ties and chap-sticks.

I faced all those lost arguments and ideas and aspirations and promises,

And I told them I was sorry.

They asked me why I never came looking for them, why I'd let them disappear.

I just told them the truth.  I said,

Some things need to be lost, so new things can be found.



I tied my passion to my wrist with a piece of twine,

Let it float above my head like a guardian.

It reminds me that so long as that knot holds,

(I double-tied it just to be safe),

It doesn't matter how many things I lose,

I'll keep what matters.
Comments appreciated. :D

If you like this, you may enjoy my short story "Forever" [link]

It's sort of similar.

Thanks for all the nice things you're saying guys, you're all so kind!
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The vision... it's really very deep. Very beautiful. Very meaningful. It shows what truly matters. It's the things on the inside, not the outside that count, and although the outside things are really nice, they can be distracting and... you really need to focus on what's real.
The originality is brilliant. I've never seen anything like this before. Very one-of-a-kind.
The technique is very fine, very precise. It captures the writer's depth of thought, and all the emotions in this, all of that in just a few words.
It affected me deeply. How well this was written, it's like it's happening to you right here, right now.
This was beautiful.
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TheRand0mArtist Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Amazing, I don't know what to say, it really made me look at things diffrently, I liked it a lot! Good job!
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bittersweet-ink Featured By Owner Dec 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
this is just wonderful ♥
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Bairdsgirl11797 Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:faint: You're amazing.
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ArthurFan3 Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2013
lose Bunny
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LiliWrites Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:wave: Hello!

I've used your awesome deviation as part of my #TheTitlePage project, found here: liliwrites.deviantart.com/art/…

Thanks for sharing your art with the community. :heart:
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Fysialis Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
This is honestly one of the most beautiful things I have ever read!! Thank you so much for making this exist.
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BatmanWithBunnyEars Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2013   General Artist
I've seen people talk about abstract nouns like physical things before, but seldom this effectively.  I love how natural and unpretentious the language is; it feels like you're leveling with me about a great truth.  I can see why it's so popular, since it left an impression that I think will stick with me.
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snowtigress27 Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2013
Beautiful!!! The imagery is simple but powerful. And everything is so relatable to the audience. By the title I expected this to be dark and gloomy about broken hearts and losing someone you love. But it was cheerful. Thoughtful, but positive. Well done!!
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Wolfandlion66 Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2013
amazingness
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