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Dear You

You are a hurricane.
You are a volcano.
You are a flurry of beautiful violence;
A plume of volcanic ash cast into the sky.

You are all the voices of the world;
A scream and a whisper and a sigh.
You are the beauty of the earth;
An exquisite wildfire, divine in its destruction.

And you are so strong.
You are stronger than this weight on your shoulders,
You are stronger than this emptiness in your chest,
You are stronger than all these things that dare get in your way.

You will charge past these things;
These regrets, these desires, these insecurities.
You will get through every pitfall and mistake and slipup,
And you’ll be made better for it.

You are unbeatable, unconquerable and unstoppable.
Every obstacle, an opportunity,
Every failure, a lesson.
You will beat this because you are better than this.

You will beat this because you are you.
And that is a powerful thing.
Sometimes people need to be reminded that they are badasses who can do anything.

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:iconwolfprincess87:
This is a beautiful and empowering piece of literature. The descriptiveness and imagery this portarys is beautiful. The powerful message in this poem rings true for myself and I am sure many others. My favorite piece of this would have to be the beginning. The words 'a flurry of beautiful violence' are gorgeous, the images that come to mind are beautiful and powerful! This poem if full of powerful encouragement. It certainly gives me a sense of strength and accomplishment. To be able to face difficulties and challenges in life are important in shaping us into who we are. Making us stronger and able to help others. Nicely done.
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First, let me start off by saying it's such a pleasure to read a poem on the front page that isn't generic nonsense! So keep in mind that while I can be nit-picky, it's because I see quite a bit of potential here.

The first stanza is perfect. It sets the tone of the poem succinctly and elegantly, using just the right words to paint the picture. The second stanza, too, is quite powerful. I particularly like the second line.

I think after this point, though, the poem becomes a little less forceful, the diction not as nearly as strong as it is in the first two stanzas. The emotional impact is there, as is a sense of rhythm. The words themselves, though, are just a bit sluggish.

I think one of the issues may be that you don't really expand on the natural disaster metaphor introduced in the first stanza (hurricane, volcano). You started off with great images like "
"a flurry of beautiful violence" and "a plume of volcanic ash cast into the sky" that are so specific. In the next few stanzas, the descriptions are too vague and general. Regrets, insecurities, desires? These things are great to explore and all, but what are their significance? What is so important about them and how can they relate to the metaphor established in the first stanza?

I think that's what this poem needs, its images better established. And if you can do this, this will be a very strong piece indeed!
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:iconmonsoon19:
This is beautiful!
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cjsylvester Feb 9, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:') thank-you
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:iconyaoi-bugg:
today was one of those days that i spent alone, thinking about everything i had to deal with all at once
so i decided to see what dA had for me and ran into this
it was just what i needed
thank you :]
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dahntildusk Jan 14, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Can I say that I loved this before I even finished reading it? I felt drawn to it... if that's a thing.


If not, oh well. I really liked this~
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:iconturtlemelon17:
Truly and completely inspirational! I absolutely love this. Thank you!
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:iconthegreathsilgne:
I can do anything!
Just take a look. It's in a book:
A READING RAINBOW!
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RoseScarlet Dec 27, 2012  Student Writer
That's really beautiful!
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:iconchonideno:
I have to thank you from the deepest part of what I am. Sometimes, we actually have to be reminded what we are capable of and you did it pretty well.
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SapphiraBlue Dec 25, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
This poem made my day. I love it. The first stanza is my favorite.
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PhsycoTatie Dec 25, 2012  Student Digital Artist
powerful and touching
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