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Chapter 1 – Child's Play

The sun was setting over the hills and the sky glowed pink.  The last golden lights of the evening spilled over the forest floor, dappling the low growing foliage and bed of pine needles beneath.  The honey light squeezed through a narrow crevice and into a small loamy wolf den.
There were three of the animals within – two adults and a small pup.  The adults lay still, sleeping soundly, their bodies pressed together tightly.  One of them was a large grey male with a thick reddish stripe down his back, and sleeping beside him was his mate.  She was a petite wolf with a pale silvery pelt and a white underbelly.  Behind them, the dark reddish ball of fur that was their pup spun in circles, snapping at her tail.  After several failed attempts to catch it, she fell back on her haunches, and eyed her parents mischievously.  
"Dad?" she called quietly.
The big male didn't move.  
She frowned, bounding forward and pushing her head into his side gently.
"Dad," she called again, slightly annoyed.
When he still didn't budge, she sat back on her hunches, and narrowed her eyes at him.  After a moment's contemplation, she took several steps back and charged, barreling into his side.  All three wolves slid across the sandy bottom of the den.
Her parents awoke with a start, her father glancing around wildly.
"What! What's wrong? What's happening?"
The little pup smirked in satisfaction, holding her white-tipped tail high and pricking her ears forward.
"I'm bored," she announced.
Her father groaned and placed his head back on his paws, snuggling close to his mate again and shutting his eyes again.
"Go back to sleep, Alari. You can go out and play at midnight."
"But I'm not tired."
"Get tired."
"You can't just get tired."
Her father opened a single bright yellow eye, and glared at her warningly.
"Try."
Alari scowled at him and then padded over to his side, snuggling up to his broad grey chest and closing her eyes.  After a couple of seconds she shifted positions.  After another couple, she rolled over on her back and stared at the earthy ceiling.  She could see roots of plants and trees peeking through the hard-packed reddish dirt. A dusty chunk of it dropped down and hit her squarely on the nose.  She sneezed and rolled over again.
"Alari stop moving," growled her father.
"I can't get comfortable."
"Try—"
"But I can't."
Her father heaved a sigh and sat up to look at her.  She was on her back again, white front paws tucked into her fluffy white underbelly, inquisitive green eyes staring up at him innocently.  It had always been difficult for him to scold her when he was looking at her.  She'd inherited her mother's enormous leafy eyes and her thick, glossy fur.  His was so thin and wiry, he was thankful she'd taken after his mate, Flutter. When he spoke, his voice came out gentler than he intended.
"Alari, I've had a long day.  I need to sleep—"
"But Dad—"
"—I know you're not tired, but I can't take you out to play right now, and you're not allowed to leave the den all alone."
"I bet Blue's awake.  She could look after me – and I'd get to play with my friends too!"
This was a conversation he didn't want to have.  Alari flipped onto her feet, reddish fur glimmering in sparse rays of evening light.  She was looking at him with such excitement, and her white-tipped tail wagged wildly behind her.  Why do I always have to be the bad guy? He thought helplessly.
"Alari, I've been meaning to talk to you about Blue and her pups…" He began awkwardly.  Her face fell immediately and her tail drooped to the ground.  She knew she was in for bad news.  That was another thing she'd inherited from her mother – the ability to see right through him.
"What about them?" She asked, stepping forward cautiously.  He couldn't bare to look her in the eyes.  He ducked his head away and scratched the soil with a dulled black claw.  She wouldn't like what he had to say.  Best get it done with quickly.
"You know what a loner is, don't you?" he began.
"I'm not stupid, of course I do.  A wolf without a pack."
"Blue's parents were both loners, and her pups' father was is too."
"I know that.  So?"
"So, it is a grave dishonor to be the pup of a loner – Blue was only allowed into the pack because she was young and her mother abandoned her. And even then it was an extraordinary kindness of my Father to allow her to be taken in.  When she announced she was pregnant with that nomad's pups, much of the pack called for her banishment.  But I've let her stay, and I've let them live. I've been much more lenient than most alphas would be – but this is where I draw the line.  I won't have my own pup associating with such…such filth."
"Well I don't care who their father was.  They're my best friends, it wouldn't matter if their Dad was a badger, I'd still—"
"Alari this isn't about you! How do you think it looks to the pack when I let my own daughter carry on with their kind.  There are things about being Alpha you don't understand, and keeping a good reputation among the pack is one of them.  Now, there are plenty of other, nice, respectable pups in the pack for you to play with, you have no reason to play with Blue's.  You need to promise me that you'll—"
"No!" snapped Alari, soft reddish fur puffing up around her neck.  Her father watched those whimsical green eyes harden to rock solid anger and determination.  She'd inherited that particular expression from him, "You aren't Alpha Fang to me, Dad! You can't order me around!  They're my friends and I happen to like them!  I don't care about your stupid reputation!" she turned tail and ran, wiggling her way out of the den.
"Alari!" He called after her, but she was gone.
Fang stood up, the reddish strip of fur down his back grazed the low ceiling of the den.  
"You did kind of deserve that," commented Flutter sleepily from where she'd been laying the entire time.
"I'm going out after her," Fang told his mate, heading towards the entrance.  Flutter yawned and sat up, shaking the dust from her pale grey coat.
"You don't have to do that, Fang. She's just going to see Blue.  Whatever her lineage, you know she's responsible.  She'll take care of her," Fang's mate soothed him, trotting over and nuzzling his neck.  
Fang hesitantly nuzzled her back, glancing out the place Alari had disappeared warily.
"I should apologize to her…" he murmured.
"What you should do is sleep. She'll forgive you.  You're no good to anyone without a clear head. "
"I suppose you're right," said Fang softly, tearing his gaze away from the den's entrance and smiling at her, "you're always right."
Flutter smiled and licked his muzzle.

Alari was wrong.  Blue wasn't awake yet – her pups however, were.  Bone and Midnight were bickering as always, their eyes locked and their fur puffed up.
"You tell Mom!" Midnight snarled, her luxurious black fur ruffling over her shoulders.  The lithe black pup's fur had grown long and silky as of recently, which mirrored the way her brother Bone's fur came, in thick, rough and short like their father's.  The oversized white pup shrunk away from her.
"N-no! I was asleep when it happened! You tell Mom!"
"Stop making excuses!  You're just scared!  Come on, Bone. There are scarier things in the world than Mom you big, stupid, 'fradie-fox! Tell her!"
Bone was shaking, his tail curled around his toes, his ears folded backward in fear. Although he was physically much larger than his sister, she terrified him. Since birth, Bone had carried a shy, cautious disposition, contrasting his sister's loud and bold personality.  He hated being yelled at, and if Midnight was talking, there was a good chance she was yelling at him.  He wished Luna were there.  She knew how to stand up to Midnight.  But if Luna were there, this wouldn't be a problem in the first place.  
There was a rustling from just outside the den, and Bone and Midnight looked to see Alari poking her head through the entrance into their den.  
Blue opened her eyes groggily and yawned.  She smiled when she saw Alari letting herself into the den.  Blue had a soft spot for Fang's pup.  Despite having grown up with him, she'd never been close with Fang himself, due largely to his outlook on her parentage.  She knew he was a good wolf, just not an easy wolf to get along with.  Alari was different.  Blue saw all of Fang's decency in her with none of the moodiness.  Alari was Fang how he should have been, and Blue hoped that one day the reddish pup would be named Alpha Female.  She could see the makings of great leader within her.
"Alari," she beamed, "to what do I owe the pleasure?  Where are your parents?"
"They wanted to sleep, but my Dad told me I could come and play with my friends.  Can Bone, Luna and Midnight come out to play?" she stumbled through her words clumsily.  Blue knew she was lying.  That was another mark of a good leader – Alari was a terrible liar.  Blue eyed her sternly.  She was about to call Alari out on her untruth but Midnight cut her off.
"Bone and I could go but Luna can't."
Blue turned around in surprise.
"What do you mean, Midnight?"
"She left the den about an hour ago," Midnight explain matter-of-factly, "At least, that's what Bone told me. I was asleep when it happened."  The little black pup threw her brother a sour look and ruffled her silky fur out, like a preening bird.  Bone lowered his head.  He didn't have the courage to argue the truth.
"Bone, is this true?" gasped Blue.
"I'm sorry, Mamma…" mumbled the large white pup, lowering himself closer to the ground in fear of his mother's wrath.
"By the Moon, Bone! You're twice her size!  Next time Luna tries to leave alone, just pin her down and wake me up!" she barked at him in frustration.  He rested his pure white muzzle on the ground and covered his face with an oversized paw.
"Y-yes, Mom."
"For goodness sake, pups!  How many times have I told you to keep an eye on your sister?  Foxscat." She swore, "I have to go find Luna before she gets herself killed.  That pup has less sense than a deaf rabbit.  You three – stay here.  Don't leave this den without my supervision – that goes for you too, Alari! Stay,"  Blue commanded.


Careful now, careful. Luna told herself as she slithered forward.  Her tail was sticking out straight behind her and her ears were pricked forward, her snout pointed at her quarry.
The toad was a light brown-and-yellow hue, speckled with oaky warts. Just like Cliff taught you, she told herself, trying to remember the way the pack's Beta had taught her to walk when stalking small game.  He'd told her she was getting much better and that she'd soon be able to catch her own prey.  He was out on an extended off-territory hunt for the next few days, but she couldn't wait to continue learning.  She'd woken up early that day for the express purpose of sneaking out and catching something.  She planned to bring it back to her den and save it until Cliff came back and she could show him what an accomplished hunter he'd trained.
One paw in front of the other, slowly, slowly,  his words coaxed gently as she glided forward – silent as a snake. The toad hadn't moved.  Its neck expanded and retracted, but its muscles hadn't tensed in preparation for a leap.  She was doing it! She was really doing it!
A groan echoed through the forest, startling her prey.  The toad leapt away and disappeared into the underbrush.
Luna didn't have time to be disappointed.  She was already bounding off in search of the source of the sound.  Her white underbelly tracked mud and the silver-grey fur on her back picked up burrs as she dashed over the terrain, but unlike her sister, she wasn't very concerned with grooming.  She reached the base of a small hill and saw a weakly breathing dark grey figure at the top.  It was accompanied by the scent of fear – and the scent of blood.  Suddenly Luna didn't feel so safe, out in the forest all alone.
She took a few tentative steps forward, and the thing didn't move.  She took a few more, less careful steps towards it, and then broke into a run.
It was a dark grey wolf pup – he looked few months older than Luna herself, and there was sticky half-dried blood caking his fur all over – especially on his belly.  She took a step back from him, tucking her tail between her legs in distress. She could see he was still breathing, but he smelled like death.  He wouldn't be breathing for long.  Her instincts told her to run away, but Luna couldn't bring herself to leave his side – not even to run and go get help.  He was so small and alone and in such dire need of a friend.
She stepped forward and prodded him with her snout quickly, taking three steps back after doing so.
"Hello?" she whispered.
To her surprise, at her touch he opened his eyes, blinking, and looked up at her in confusion.
"Where am I?" He asked her, his voice hoarse.
"You're on the territory of the Pack of Night, the greatest pack in all of the North!  Who are you?  Where did you come from?  What happened to you?" She asked, bombarding him with questions.  Now that he was awake, she was more excited than anything else. Luna had never met a wolf outside of her own pack – let alone a pup.
The amber-eyed stranger sat up slowly, his muscles visibly aching, and sat in silence for a moment.  The tip of one of his dark grey ears was folded over and his fur was grimy and disheveled.  The blood was smudged all over his underbelly and side, as if he'd scarped up against something.  Luna also noticed that there was a thick layer of mud under his claws, and the base of those claws as well as the pads of his feet seemed raw.  From what Luna could remember, that was usually a sign of a lot of running without stops.  This pup must have come from far away.   A truly great observer is a truly great hunter, Cliff's voice congratulated her in her head.  But he was so young.  Luna wasn't even supposed to be out of her den without her parents, what could possible have caused this pup to run so far all alone?
His expression was so somber.  Luna had never seen a pup
- or anyone, for that matter – looking so lost.
"I…I don't remember," he admitted, averting his eyes from her.
"Why can't you remember?" She asked.
"I don't know…" He whispered looking into her eyes pleadingly, "I just…it's all gone.  I can't remember anything at all."
  She felt an overwhelming surge of affection for the strange pup.  He
seemed so alone and sad, at that moment the only thing in the whole world Luna wanted was to see him happy
"That's okay," she said, smiling at him kindly, "You'll be okay.  You can stay here with us until you find out where you come from, okay?  Do you remember your name at least?"
"Lupis…" he mumbled, looking at his paws.  Luna nuzzled him under his chin comfortingly.
"My name is Luna. You'll be safe with me.  Come on, we should get back to—"
"Luna!" Blue's enraged voice permeated the surroundings, "What have I told you about wandering off?"
Eh. A lot of people have requested I do a written version of COTW, and since I didn't have access to an animation program today, I decided to do the first chapter.

Please comment and tell me what you think, if you think I should continue, and as always, with any writing critique you could possibly have!

PS - if you read it, please decide to have paragraphs visible. Its a button on the top right that looks like a backwards "p".

Thank you <3
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This is a real excellent version of "Cow of the Wild". I have watching it since last year and you really had come a long way. But, there are still a few flaws.

What meant was that while the story is one that is heard many times before, but in this case, it still told very well.

I have to admit, it was sort of a dick move on Fang's part of telling Alari shouldn't play with Bone, Luna, and Midnight. I know, tradition and stuff, but come on man. :iconfacehoofplz:

Beyond that, it creates a vivid picture of the cave and the forest and feel Harold hoppin' by. :)

All in all: 4 1/2 Harolds out of 5.

Peace.

:)
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Very interesting I will say. I not much of a writer, but I will say, that this...This is very well done, so kudos to you. But I will say that the part: Luna nuzzled him under his chin.: Why did she do that. I have seen the animation, but I still don't get that part. Was it that she already had feelings for him? Or was she comforting him? I know I sound, "stupid" asking, but I just don't get that.
Anyways, Overall this is well written, and I would hardly change a thing. Oh, and one more thing...I enjoy reading the well-known 'movie', so thanks for making it!
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Shadow-Ku Featured By Owner May 20, 2015  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I've been a fan of your animated CotW for years, but this written version. Loved it! Please do the whole story!
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DragonDragoo Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2015  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I just love this. It would be so awesome to see this on TV as an episode.
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sjfhghydjcnvjfcjs Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2014
AWESOME I LOVE READING AND COTW THIS IS PERFECT KEEP CONTINUING IT PLEASE B)
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Moorwind Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2014
This is really good! If Cow Of The Wild never makes it to TV I think you should consider publishing this!
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DemonFeralWolf Featured By Owner Oct 16, 2013  Student Artist
Better than what I write XD
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Quarake Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2012  Student Digital Artist
To be honest after watching your videos and reading the chapters you have out, I want to hug you ^.^. When COTW is finished, witch im not sure when it will be, seeing as it must be very hard to animate, write, reply, and boss your voice actors around :p, You should really consider making fire and ice of the warriors, seeing as your cats have gotten so much better over the years. Though I know of one person who is making fire and ice, it has been taking them like a year to get on with the third episode, so I flocked my way over to you. Consider it, you will make Quarake happeh!

~Quarake~
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Djgem2001 Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2012
OMG THIS IS AWESOME! :D
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COWOFTHEWILDRULES Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2012  Student General Artist
:D Love it<3
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pussrik Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Oh man this is just genius! This is exactly what a novel based from a movie would do; not making the words exact from the actual movie!
This is beautiful; I cannot wait to see the rest of the chapters
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mangowolfie Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow, for a second I thought I was reading an actual published book. This is amazing!
I don't think I see any major mistakes, I love it!
The details are spot-on, and I would buy if this were a book.
You have talent, honestly.
Just one question - was COTW first an animation, or a story?
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tribble-of-doom Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Aww thank you <3

It's an animation. :3 Would you like a link?
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mangowolfie Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I'm fine, thanks, I already watch it on YouTube, and I love it. :heart:
Can't wait until the next chapter. :D
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tribble-of-doom Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Oh xD Why did you ask then? :P

Anyway, thanks muchly for watching then <3
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mangowolfie Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
No problem. ^^;
And I think on YouTube, you mentioned that one of your friends is a chapter ahead of us, and I thought you were talking about the story, but I guess you were talking about the animation script? :XD:
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tribble-of-doom Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
One of my friends..? @.@ I don't remember saying that.
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mangowolfie Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
It was in the description of one of the videos, wasn't it?
Maybe I'm just confusing things.. :P
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tribble-of-doom Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Methinks you might be @.@
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Pivypiv Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2012
animation
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DarkInsanity2359 Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2012
This was really good. There were a few parts that sounded a bit awkward (such as "harden to rock hard determination," as well as a few others), but for the most part it was fine. And, of course, that's only one person's opinion. This was great to read though and it'd be nice to see more!
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tribble-of-doom Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thankies :D I actually went through and edited that out now, cause I noticed that too :P
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hawkstar1313 Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2012  Student Artist
I love it. Is this the full script? I have watched the entire series and I love them. A few of comments though.
One. Where do they Live? I mean, and actual place, or made up?
Two. @Qinnly Luna probably did that because she lost her best friend, and it was all her fault.
Three. Herold is amazing! Great job!
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hawkstar1313 Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2012  Student Artist
LOL okay... i did that half asleep...
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Pivypiv Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2012
I’d assume the wolves live somewhere in Alaska/America/Canada, because there was a mention somewhere in the animation of caribou, which I think live only in that area.
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tribble-of-doom Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
This isn't how a script looks xD
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TranquilPaws Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
This is amazing! I like reading it more than watching it, I think there's more detail. :3
Please continue this; if this was a book I would buy it. c:
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tribble-of-doom Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Aww thank you <3

Maybe I'll self publish at one point so people could buy it in book for if they felt like it :3
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OokamiFreak Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Can't finnd a single thing in this i don't like :D I write myself, and i would love to make a story about wolves, but just don't know how, since i find it very difficult, so i think it is fantastic how you told this; how you describe the forest in great detail, without slowing the story down! This is amazing; Great Job tribbs :D
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tribble-of-doom Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Aww thank you very much <3
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OokamiFreak Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
You are VERY welcome, and you deserve the praise :) You are a great person (from what i've gathered around the internet, on your youtube profiles, and on your deviantart journals) and deserve anything but haters complaining :) Happy that you decided to both write and animate CotW
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Pivypiv Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2012
So awesome! Continue Continue Continue!

I’m glad that we finally known a bit more about Blue’s past. That was bugging me.
And I’m wondering, what happened to Fang and Cliff’s relationship that made Fang demote Cliff from beta? Or can there be more than one beta?
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tribble-of-doom Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Noo, he was most certainly demoted. In the year after Flutter died, Cliff was pushing for common sense and Fang was losing his marbles, so he eventually demoted him from Beta and took on Bone (although Bone is technically too young to be given the rolo f Beta) because he never questioned his orders.

I don't really explain that very well in the show, even in later episodes @.@
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Fernclanforever Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2012  Student Digital Artist
It's amazing Tribbs! I think you should keep going with it. c:
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Windyfeather Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I didn't really expect this but when I saw this, I was like "Holly shiet this is epic"

I love the way you introduced the characters. They way you portray them as well :D It's so epic ^^ I hope COTW has much more surprise in it to come ^^
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EllaScout Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I really like this!
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Chesirethekitten Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I think it was quite interesting and entertaining to read COTW instead of watching it. As for the chapter, I loved it alot, the only thing that stumped me was when Fang was telling Alari why she couldn't play with Bone, Luna and Midnight, he said that Blue was pregnant with Nomad's pups, I thought they were Saber's, but I could be wrong.
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tribble-of-doom Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Lmao!

Um, yes, "nomad" is an adjective, not a name ;P Nomad means like, wanderer.

Saber is his name, nomad-a-fy-ing is his game
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Chesirethekitten Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
OOOOOH
It all makes sense now :iconfacehoofplz:
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wolffang29 Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2012
Hey tribbs mi bday is coming up may u plz make me a character well mi own character wolf I made but I would like u to animate it plz plz plz I would be so happy if uz did this and if yes this is wat she looks like

She looks like sterling from sterling under and looks like Apollo from COTW and she has three pups named L.M.I, Deka, and Tekia and her mate is named RedHood so if u can animate this in wolf form I would be happy and this is for mi special awesome surprise party but it's a surprise party so I don't know wat my parties gonna be bout but plz make this for mi and mi bday is on Friday
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wolffang29 Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2012
Well u made a chapter finally but I thought u said I could make the chapters and u could read them or u lied or wanted to do it ur self
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Hanyuu-Kitty-chan Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2012
Of course we already know why people start hating on Midnight by daring Alari to go to the fence. Midnight you idiot. B|
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Patch21 Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2012
I think Midnight told Luna 2 leave and Bone just doesn't want 2 get hurt by Midnight.
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SamoyedWarrior Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2012  Student Digital Artist
This officially made my decade.
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Wingdacat Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
i love it!!

so much detail that you usualy can't do in an animation.
you can read the thoughts and find out things you didn't know.

(for instance, i did not know Luna was taught by Cliff to hunt...)
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BambiBoo17 Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
LOVE IT
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snowywolf13 Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
This is amazing! Very well written, and it seems like a real book I could buy in bookstores. I hope you continue!
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pengirl389265 Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
more, more,more!!!! please
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GaIaxyGazlng Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Luv it!!! :clap:
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XXjennielynnXX Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2012  Student General Artist
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DEUSEXMACHlNA Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
wow..... this is amazing XDi love it <3<#<#
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Hawkwing-Mistkit Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2012
THIS IS EPIC!!!!! i love written stories of animated series and movies! i think this is REALLY good, but you you should mention what color their fur is in the beginning more so that we (the readers) know what they look like. you did a good job, but i dont think you discribed Fang's appearence and you could mention more details in the beginning (as in the color of their fur for Flutter and Fang)
other than that, you did a really good job!
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