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This may very well be my favorite piece of yours to date. It's short, sweet, and to the point, but still manages to captivate your attention and really make you think. The brain facts were an excellent touch, and as per usual with your work, it's worth noting for originality alone.
I think what caught my attention most was the fact that it accurately represents a part of everyday life that we are all aware of, but rarely take time to reflect upon. If you look at the physical events in the plot, there's not very much going on. Most of what happens is in the minds of the characters, which is both a realistic way to look at a subway ride and a unique insight into something we often forget goes on at all.
All things considered, I loved this piece. There's nothing really earth-shattering about the writing, but the formatting you used and the psychology behind it are enough to keep this one on your mind for a few hours after you read it. Amazing work!
I also love how the minds interact with eachother. I haven't ever seen anything like this before...
Also, I love how the Minds are constantly talking, thinking, analyzing, because its very true, our minds always work.
Love it Tribbs, and happy (Late ) Birthday!
I love theatre so much ;_;
I have to find a way to see this produced (with your permission of course) even if it's not with the players.
I just need to say that Sophia's ramblings are a little out there, which when I thought about it at first was a bit awkward, but then I found it to be very true to form. I have a lot of one-sided conversations (or something that doesn't sound crazy... maybe extended interior exposition?) with people who aren't there all. the. time.
I love the title too C: CLEVERR.
Sophia's comparison of having unending limerence to "true love" isn't really warranted. Once limerence wears off, provided the couple likes each other for more than physical reasons, not much changes. I just manipulated the information for my own purposes because I'm evil.
Didn't mean to make you feel paranoid or anything!
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Honestly (and perhaps it's the nerd in me), I adored this. No critique for you; I loved it as is. It's a fun concept executed with more thought-provoking sentiments than I ever anticipated. Well done.
Also reminds me of a little show I watched the other day, the Science of Sex Appeal. Both intriguing and depressing in some ways xD The arrangement of someone's facial proportions, body movement-- even our pheromones are ancient defense mechanisms against incest. Our brains are curious things.
but it was good , i like the ending where"spoilers" ( both their minds exit behind them , i could almost imagine a ghost like figure of both them behind them )